Thursday, April 22, 2010

Blue- Eyed Squall

You, crowing about
the fierceness of tomorrow

Your rantings about reverberations and rust
have no traction with me

Your heart has become an emporium
for intergenerational fears

A blue-eyed squall whose attempts
to make me dizzy only fail

Do not try to distract me
with your new saffron colored underwear
or tendrils of a new weave

I will remain up
I will not flinch

Hey, nice earrings

~ J. D. Mackenzie

(inspired by Catherine's Day 22 NaPoWriMo prompt, Wordle)

8 comments:

  1. I especially like the end line. :-)

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  2. It's like a man is talking to his wife
    oh!But ...hell,it is good..
    man,I liked it!
    A blue eyed squall...wow...and who attempts to make you dizzy...really enjoyed it
    I think the starting of the poem maintains the touch till the end:)

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  3. WOW! The whole idea of "intergenerational fears" will haunt me the rest of the day, JD! Thanks! Have a splendid day!

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  4. Haunting is a good description. Nicely turned phrases - daunting, actually - with a complete shift in tone with your last line!

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  5. JDM,
    Love the ending! Quite a surprise.
    Pamela

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  6. blue-eyed squall...wow!...and, yes, that last line!

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  7. Those earrings really pull the ensemb together, don't they?

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  8. JDM, great poem, appears like penned with so much ease. And the last line ofcourse!

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